gone

you've left me and you've gone
gone
gone
gone
I didn't expect you to stay
I wanted you to stay
but this is better
somehow
someway

Comments

  1. Martin ShoneSeptember 29, 2011 8:27 AM

    Hi Trisha, I liked this poem the first time around. The emptyness is obvious here, but also so is the uncertainty of wanting the gap filled or not.

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  2. Trisha ViciousSeptember 29, 2011 12:08 PM

    Hi Martin,
    Good eye ... it's nice to know who's reading! ... and thank you for the comments. Your encouraging words keep me writing!

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  3. Martin ShoneSeptember 29, 2011 2:07 PM

    Oh do please keep writing, Trisha. A lot of poetry (especially competition winners, etc) I just can't read or understand, it's like looking at an abstract painting and have to be told what is in the artist's mind and what the painting is about.
    Whereas your poetry is ... is poetry, you seem to be able to put your words down on paper and create the most honest pictures that I truly understand and empathise with.

    Martin.

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